Thursday, August 31, 2006

II: 73

snack room --
the litigator takes
one-third of the donuts

August 31st is "Love Litigating Lawyers Day"

2 Comments:

At September 01, 2006 11:16 PM, Anonymous ed m said...

david,
nice senryu. send it to al.
revised the labor day piece
i emailed earlier...


Labor Day
the wal-mart greeter's
frozen smile


talk to ya later

 
At September 05, 2006 11:00 AM, Blogger david giacalone said...

Hi, Ed. Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to this site to respond to you -- I'm out of the habit of checking out this dusty old weblog.

I'm glad you like "snack room," and (as I've told you by email), your Labor Day wal-mart senryu is a winner. As we/ve discussed, the changing of one word can make a very big difference.

In my opinion, adjectives in senryu should describe rather than ascribe.

 

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